do i say to much on mine?

11/6/2009 7:33:25 PM	do i say to much on mine?
the_fen Roseville, CA age: 31 online now!	its my 1st day here.
11/6/2009 7:56:02 PM	do i say to much on mine?
naughtical Winter Haven, FL age: 50	Actually, yes...you did say too much. Your profile should end with this paragraph: In my job I go to older peoples homes and alot of them have been married years, and still get along great and laugh and joke, when I'm there, thats who I want to find! Everything after that is pointless and full of negativity. Too much use of "I" and to make it worse you don't capitalize most of them...sign of laziness. You also use way too many commas and many misspelled words. You have only two pictures...both contain your dog. Does a girl really stand a chance? It's really not a bad profile...just needs some fine tuning. Good luck.
11/6/2009 8:30:39 PM	do i say to much on mine?
the_fen Roseville, CA age: 31 online now!	thanks, but how do I keep out the weeds without saying something negative?
11/6/2009 9:21:07 PM	do i say to much on mine?
the_fen Roseville, CA age: 31 online now!	Ok how about now????
11/6/2009 11:34:41 PM	do i say to much on mine?
meekor007 Tulsa, OK age: 50	good to be honest but you kept going back and forth on money issues .decide on 1 and stick to itthe people here will try to help you out too I just give my 2 cents for what its worth lol