| 1/9/2008 5:37:38 PM | My song, need opinion | | 
moonracer
Baker, LA
age: 21
| Well, for years i've been writing random stuff, being the creative writer that i am. Well, For once, i want a public opinion of what everyone thinks of this particular song. I'm thinking of having it published, or see about having it become an actual song. But, before i do so, i wanna find out what everyone thinks of it!!! So, having said taht, here it is!!
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"That Night I Remember"
By Mark Norred
That night I remember,
The first time I met you.
You were happy as can be,
But you seemed sad and lonely.
So I talked to you all night long,
Until the next morning, you were gone.
I thought I'd never see you again,
And it was at that moment when,
I saw you once more.
That night I remember,
The night I said I love you.
You just stood there silently,
And I said "I am so sorry".
Then you smiled and you kissed me,
and said "I'm glad you told me."
And for the rest of the night,
We just laid there in the light,
Of the moon and the stars.
Through day and night,
Night and day,
Its me and you forever.
And through the good times
and the bad,
We can face the weather.
That night I remember,
The night I became a daddy.
She just laid there in your arms,
Feeling completely safe and warm.
Then she looked into my eyes,
I was so happy, that I cried.
We became a family,
It was you and it was me,
And our darling daughter.
Through day and night,
Night and day,
Its me and you forever.
And through the good times
and the bad,
We can face the weather.
That night I'll remember,
The night we'll take our last breaths.
I will hold you close and tight,
And let you know that its alright.
But before we enter heaven,
I'll have but just one question.
I'll ask "Did you ever forget,
The night that me and you first met?"
(and you'll say)
"That night.......I remember."
[Edited 1/9/2008 6:42:02 PM]
| | 1/9/2008 5:45:39 PM | My song, need opinion | |
moonracer
Baker, LA
age: 21
| lol, guess not worth looking at o.o
| | 1/9/2008 5:47:32 PM | My song, need opinion | | 
reenie4
Milwaukee, WI
age: 51
|  moon.... very nice... what type of music for the lyrics? 
| | 1/9/2008 5:49:23 PM | My song, need opinion | |
moonracer
Baker, LA
age: 21
| slow beat, country genre, lol which is ironic, cuz i dont listen to all that much country
| | 1/9/2008 5:56:35 PM | My song, need opinion | |
reenie4
Milwaukee, WI
age: 51
| I actually was thinking when I was reading the words that it makes a good country song .... personally i'm not a country music fan... but i appreciate all genres.. it's easier to state the ones that don't really do anything for me... I can count those on one hand  Would love to hear it put with music
| | 1/9/2008 5:59:14 PM | My song, need opinion | | 
lovesillusion11
Moab, UT
age: 25
| i thought it was very touching! omg how sweet!
| | 1/9/2008 6:01:19 PM | My song, need opinion | |
moonracer
Baker, LA
age: 21
| heheh =^-^= i'm hoping to get this put to music as well, i already have in my head one way it would go, but lol i cant play that many instruments at once. but before i decide to do something like that, i'm wanting to get more opinions on the matter....but lol you're the only fan of it one way or another so far...might be the only one lol
EDIT: make that two, heheh ty lovesillusion =^-^=
[Edited 1/9/2008 6:01:54 PM]
| | 1/9/2008 6:05:46 PM | My song, need opinion | |
candelicious2u
Norlina, NC
age: 41
| make it 3 moon......i am sitting here trying to sing it with other songs i have heard...beautiful words!!!!...would be cool if WHEN u got it put to music to give us a link so we could hear it too! good luck getting it out there!
| | 1/9/2008 6:07:49 PM | My song, need opinion | | 
plowboyboots
Bon Aqua, TN
age: 22
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| | 1/9/2008 6:08:11 PM | My song, need opinion | |
moonracer
Baker, LA
age: 21
| =^-^= thanks candelicious, heheh it is one of my aspirations in life to be a writer/composer, and seemingly i'm right in wanting to do so. but, the more the merrier when it comes to opinions, so keep em coming!
EDIT: lol plowboy, i'm guessing you approve as well
[Edited 1/9/2008 6:09:04 PM]
| | 1/9/2008 6:09:47 PM | My song, need opinion | |
plowboyboots
Bon Aqua, TN
age: 22
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| | 1/9/2008 6:10:27 PM | My song, need opinion | |
reenie4
Milwaukee, WI
age: 51
| Moon hun, don't feel that opinions from people on here matter.... take your dream and make it a reality!!! Some people here can be very petty and rude.... they need a reality check. Never let anything or anybody stand in your way of success!
| | 1/9/2008 6:12:37 PM | My song, need opinion | |
moonracer
Baker, LA
age: 21
| lol reezie, i completely agree with you.
although, sometimes very rude and constructive criticism is just the thing needed to improve upon myself as a writer. plus, even a small amount of people would give me a generalization of how the nation as a whole would accept it, and seemingly so far everyone would love it =^-^=
| | 1/9/2008 6:14:03 PM | My song, need opinion | |
plowboyboots
Bon Aqua, TN
age: 22
| follow your dreams, i am living mine, i have my own Farming operation, and i enjoy it, i also work with people who are mentally retarded. i have always been told, that when ya have a dream, follow it
| | 1/9/2008 6:15:56 PM | My song, need opinion | |
reenie4
Milwaukee, WI
age: 51
| That's wonderful plow..... yes moon... your fans are here
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