salali70
Americus, GA
age: 50
| You are everywhere
In the air that I breathe
In My pounding heart
In My waking moments
In every thought
As I drift off to sleep
You are everywhere
In the music that surrounds Me
In My sweetest dreams
In the memories that fill Me
In the need that guides Me
In My heart to keep
You are everywhere
In the cool night breeze
In the twinkle of the stars
In the strength that holds Me
In the laughter that escapes Me
In the tears I weep
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charmie
Glasgow, MT
age: 61
| Like the thoughts you expressed.
Needs some format, structure, less caps on ME, and some breaks to make it really stand out.
Nice work on imagery, enotion and presence.
keep writing; you have a definite way of usimg words to show your feelings.
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